Thursday, June 11, 2009


I left home,
I left the familiarity of those faces,
I left those countless arguments,
I left the warmth of the bed.

The pain is so deep
yet, I smile
my naïveté tells me
I have just come a mile.

It’s far & far away
the distance is in the mind
and to cross those seven seas
it’d take more than seven nights.

But, who wants to cross?
loneliness is a loyal friend
it follows me like a shadow
without the feeling of a bind.

6 comments:

  1. today i am really happy after seeing ur poem...i knew that u have this
    potential...only u needed was rhythm....and it's with you now.....keep
    it up....and make us happy with ur talent....

    one point,..check the last para....instead of loneliness, u may use
    aloneness..since aloneless is a blessing, loneliness may not be
    that.....and look at the last line....check whether u can use a better
    word than bind...keeping up the message u wanna to convey.....

    Sourav

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  2. mai or meri tanhai

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  3. any way good first attempt (I presume), next time try to conjure up some better metaphors

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  4. all crap...like all your other ones ...and am sure this would not be posted ...

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  5. i share the feelings with you :)!!!! 4 th year of loneliness, yet i seem to like the pain....

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  6. I feel the same way there......4 years and still in love with my loneliness...my home...lord i am one..lord i am 2..lord i am 3..lord i am 4..lord i am 500 miles away from home..........

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